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Ani Beeler's avatar

Wow, so many lines I highlighted to put in the comments and [comment] on but then I kept re-copying new things to my clipboard. This poem encapsulates so much circling that it’s practically a sphere. Sonically, anaphorically, conceptually (in that order, punctuated below with AS WELL AS):

"nailed/as flagrant as pleasant what/fragrant peasant hips/what wound in what side"

Like DAMN given that you do a syncopated subtraction (flagrant—>fragrant, pleasant—>peasant) (and YES flagrant to fragrant is a subtraction; iirc l—>r is taking a liquid and moving it to another liquid (see:phonetic classifications), which just makes for a mass of water, and in my mind that fucking counts) AS WELL AS anaphora ("what" "what" "what" —im calling it anaphora bc wtf is a line) AS WELL AS "nail—> side." Three strikes, (we’re) out.

This is gorgeous. Also. Have you ever played with pantoums? This sort of circling is exactly what that form is made for, just on a line level rather than word.

meg's avatar

Perhaps my new favorite!

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